I Have Thoughts on Privilege and Nature Stewardship

Now live at Reckoning

I originally wrote this piece around, mm, April/May 2020, and one of the cool things about having seasons is that in the middle of winter, I barely even recognize the landscape I’m describing here! (Everything is SNOW at the moment, although it is finally melting, which is

While it is all nonfiction, fortunately and less fortunately, I didn’t go out of my way to fact check the exact sequence of events, so it’s possible some things happened out of the order in which they’re described.

The photo for my bio is a particularly excellent specimen of spring beauties, which was worth ruining my sock (it was on the other side of a muddy patch, and also at that point I thought regular laundry would make the stains go away). The cool thing about these flowers is they have pink pollen, in addition to the distinctive pink lines (which can be of variable visibility to a human eye).

Here are some bonus images!

White violets. Very high on my list of poorly named flowers, along with….
YELLOW VIOLETS
Trillium grandiflorum. There’s a dark red version with smaller petals as well. One of those flowers that we routinely call by its scientific name for whatever reason
Shooting stars

DINOSAURS IN SPAAAAAACE

At last my obsession with dinosaurs has paid off! Check out the story on Cast of Wonders, Andrew K. Hoe did an amazing job with edits and Tatiana Grey rocked the narration. Come for the dinos in space, stay for the…er, anticapitalism and interrogation of discrimination? (Look, the last time I tried to write humor it turned into scathing commentary on colonialism.)

*sniff* it’s beautiful. Art by Alexis Goble

Anyway I did reference a lot of sources including NASA to find out if asteroid dust can even be sucked up, and then repeatedly went back to Wikipedia for size comparisons. I definitely owe a bunch to Stephen L. Brusatte’s THE RISE AND FALL OF THE DINOSAURS. Y’all, at a bare minimum, you need the T. rex chapter in your life.

I have decided my purchase of Beasts of the Mezozoic adult collectibles (says it on the box!) counts as an investment cause honestly? 3D models are very very helpful in conceptualizing how they’d move through space. There is some dispute over tail length and the model below is a Velociraptor mongoliensis, not a Deinonychus antirrhopus (fun fact, my friend prompted an early draft of this where all the names were based off the species), but anyway.

Aside from having the plastic featherless toys and at least one illustrated book as a kid, I’ve spent a lifetime ogling the dinosaur section of museums. It was actually the display at the Natural History Museum in London that got me specifically into Deinonychus. LOOK AT THEM THEY ARE SO FLUFFY

Deinonychus reconstruction with a light coating of hairlike feathers. Early feathers weren’t hollow like on modern birds (actually by the time of Deinonychus, Aves had split from theropods iirc anyway). Did I mention I once wrote a ten page paper on the evolution of flight in birds for a college class?

Because I vaguely mentioned Stegosaurus I would like to flex that I have SEEN THE HOLOTYPE

LOOK AT IT. LOOK AT THE HOLOTYPE SKELETON.
I’ve seen a decent number of ceratopsians, the Field Museum has a great collection, but it was a PITA to dig up so pls enjoy this one example from London!

That said I must close out with Sue, after whom the T. rex character is named of course. O:

This is Sue’s real skull, too heavy to mount on the display! The pitting in the jaw is from a fungal infection Sue had while alive, iirc.
The updated display looks SO GOOD! Seriously it is very fancy.

Now on Clarkesworld: My take on a Jain dystopia (utopia?)

Optimizing the Path to Enlightenment‘ is featured along with a whole lot of excellent work in the June 2020 issue of Clarkesworld, check it out!

Oh man…so I went from a prompt by a friend about eyelids in a glass case to this. Well, what happened is a somewhat convoluted eyelids -> eyes -> watching -> hey, you know what I’ve never done, incorporated my religious upbringing into a story, and also isn’t omniscience like a surveillance state?

That last bit is probably one of the reasons I didn’t get a metaphorical gold star in Pathshala (our version of Sunday School).

Anyway – I do want to mention that the religion here isn’t pure Jainism. The elements of “pollution” are taken more so from the Japanese and Chinese Buddhist folklore I used to read. Also, it was really hard getting into the mindset of someone who’s diametrically opposed to me – I do martial arts a lot, and finding ways to block trackers is practically a hobby at this point; I work at a hospital, I’m involved with public health, and I genuinely don’t know if I’d download a contact tracing app. (It would probably be useless since GPS is disabled on my phone, TBH.)

It did take me about a decade to be okay with killing mosquitoes, though.

Also, please don’t tell my mother about this one. 🙂

It’s cli-fi season: THE DESERT IN ME is now live at Little Blue Marble

Delighted to contribute to this publication’s mission–check my flash fiction, among other topical works, out here.

Note that the main consumer of our water supply is agriculture, much of which is consumed in the production of grain to feed livestock. So basically this piece is set in a future where things have gotten dire enough to limit even personal water consumption.

Starting A Story: HELP I’M STUCK

I’m a plot-driven writer. Before I commit anything to paper, I know where the full arc is going (setting + plot), how the characters will drive it forward, and what the themes will be.

All this should make it easy to start writing, right?

Being horrible at facial recognition doesn't pair well with drag...which is to say I think this is Katya and I love her? Haha

Yeah, so there’s a story idea I’ve been kicking around for at least a year – probably more – where I’ve written the ending, I know how I need to get to the ending, I even wrote a draft way back when, and I still have no idea where to start it.

Note that’s a where, not a how. How to start stories is simple. Subvert expectations so that the reader does a double take and before they know it, they’re sucked into the rest, like a demon summoning gone wrong.

Seriously though

What’s the deal with this story? Why isn’t it coming together when all the pieces are there?

The plot of this story is, in essence, a relationship that turns into a codependent mess because a shitty human being unintentionally trains an AI to also be shitty.

There’s three different approaches I could take to beginning this.

  1. Start with the broken human relationship that sets this off. (Which is where I began it originally.)
  2. Start with the accident, which breaks said human relationship and is integral to the plot.
  3. Start with the AI relationship, which is the meat of the main plot.

What are the pros of each?

Why not cons? Because those can be fixed in editing. I could have listed how they each influence the plot arc and ambience, but that’s the whole point of the beginning: creating that initial impression. If that starting point isn’t plonking readers where you want them, it’s not right.

I have a clear starting image for all of these, so I haven’t listed it as a pro, but that’s worth considering too.

Option 1 pros

  • Shows how the AI is supposed to work
  • Sets up the protagonist as selfish

Option 2 pros

  • Shows the moment of the AI upgrade (twist!)
  • Shows the accident

Option 3 pros

  • Can surprise readers with the revelation that the lover is an AI
  • This is the true main arc (but it needs to be explained by prior events)
  • Also, I want to

I was reluctant to jump into Option 3, even though I want to, because it’s so far ahead of the events that predicate the climax. But, as I said above, that’s something which could be fixed in editing. This is where “kill your darlings” comes in. Be open to unfixing a fixed point.

Yes, it’s gonna suck a bit to fill in the backstory. But at the same time, I’m not grabbed by the other two options, and I thought of the damn thing.

I’m not a “just start writing and sort it all later” type – I don’t work well without any direction (I am Captain Tangent) – but it is sometimes necessary to put off solving a problem until later, when you have something to look at. Simultaneously holding the words in your head and trying to sort them out is friggin’ hard.

The process of writing out the pros helped me realize just how unenthusiastic I am about the first two options, even though they’re more logical than the third. I don’t write a lot of nonlinear plots, but it looks like that’s where I’m headed right now.

So, we’ll see how that goes.

Starting a Story: Surely There’s a Happy Medium Between In Medias Res and Infodumping?

I love in medias res. I love it a lot. Too much, even. (I somehow managed to bring my writers’ group two stories in a row where it was unclear whether or not the events were actually happening.)

The other end of the spectrum, of course, is the infodump. Especially for speculative fiction, there’s a certain level of scene-setting that needs to happen before throwing the whole shebang at readers. If your story is set in 4019, it’s probably important to mention that your world experienced a mass extinction and alien invasion, and as a result the ten remaining humans live in a zoo, in addition to the usual establishing shots.

The top-down approach

I’m currently taking a class on Bayesian methods, and one fundamental concept is parameters and hyperparameters.

You may be trying to predict y with the knowledge that y = zx. If the relationship is simple, z could just be a number. But if it’s not, z could have its own formula, z = log(q). We spend time learning what q is because we care about y.

Readers need to care. A good hook will have people asking right off the bat, what why is going on? (Wow, I swear that pun was unintentional.)

Once the reader is latched on, they’ll want to know more about the background. (I say this right as I’m reading one of many Pern novels, which consistently open with background on the planet. No idea how McCaffrey’s first novel opens. If you can pull this off without already being successful, more power to you.)

Obviously, pacing is a big thing. Stopping the story to go through pages and pages of backstory will guarantee that any readers you’ve left by the end barely remember what happened before. Time and attention have to be hoarded.

My approach boils down to:

  1. Set the stage…with an action. (Or, as has been better said elsewhere, open with conflict.)
  2. Flesh out the setting. But not too much!
  3. Get into it. Once you’ve oriented the reader, disorient them with events. Set the main conflict in motion, even if you don’t tell readers what’s happening.

So for the above example, there’s a few different ways I would begin.

– Human A read the letter and threw it straight into the wall as soon as she was done.

– The letter hung on the wall, neon letters illuminating the two humans. “We have to get out of here,” A said.

For both of these, the next few lines would explain they’re in a zoo. Since they’re going to be yelling about the breeding program either way, I’ll save that for dialogue.

And then, there’s an option to flip 1 and 2, but still begin with an action:

– A bird flew straight into the clear glass of the human compound. Splat.

Here, the next few lines would zoom into our captive humans. (In my head, storytelling always involves moving around a camera like I’m filming something. I find this is a good way to avoid spending too much time describing something, including an action.)

For #3, Philip Pullman’s The Golden Compass is a good example. Even while Lyra is being a filthy urchin, the “Gobblers” come up, and then the entire scene with the Tokay not only sets up the big twist but establishes a character who is important in the sequel. As a reader who’s new to the story, we don’t know where it’s going, but all of this background is ultimately delivered on.

Beginnings need to do three things:

  1. Entice people who have no personal investment in your story
  2. Set expectations for the rest
  3. Be relevant

There’s a lot of room in between to decide how you make these things happen, but they should happen. Even people who complain that GRRM killed off the biggest idiot in Westeros can note that the first book begins and ends with an execution. The brutality of the world isn’t surprising, regardless of the events.

How and When to End a Story

I end stories on instinct. I figure out where things should end up before I commit words to paper the same time I solidify the premise.

Like,

Step 1: premise (often, interesting science/sociopolitics/economics + what if)

Step 2: where should it end?

If I can’t sort out 2 based on the premise alone, I’ll briefly think about the plot/characters. And of course, there’s more refinement when I write the thing, but I can’t think of a time when I’ve changed how things turn out.

This bothers me deeply because the concept of instinct applied to something that is learned makes no sense.

Spock gets it.

So anyway, here’s an attempt to formalize this process.

Where does the end begin, anyway?

Back in high school Creative Writing, we occasionally did this exercise called the five sentence story. It broke down like this:

  1. Setup
  2. Escalation
  3. Climax
  4. Denouement
  5. “Happily ever after” (doesn’t need to be happy)

I would say the end is #5, but with the caveat that it has to lead logically from #4, which leads logically from #3….

At any rate, this is why I figure out endings before I start writing: a) I once wasted time writing something that went nowhere, and never figured out where it should go; b) it helps define the middle bits. Knowing that the end goal is X banging vs murdering Y guides how they get there, and the word choice that goes into it.

So anyway, let’s say that the “ending” comprises the final state of your story, which may not – and perhaps even shouldn’t – be a distinct boundary. The end of the Odyssey, I would say, is when Odysseus enters his own house, deals with the suitors, and finally returns to Penelope.

Why would I put the boundary there, instead of right when he lands on Ithaca?

Callback to the beginning

The suitors are established as a threat at the start. “Secret beggar dude wandering the island” can’t deal with this, “secret Odysseus who is all kinds of good at archery and murders” can. So the final conclusion of his journey is, I’d say, where he’s not just back on the island but restored to his house, family and title.

So that’s one approach to endings: looking at the beginning and closing the loop (or making it clear the loop cannot be closed). Or, more loosely, drawing parallels. Maybe the roles are now reversed, the same thing is happening again but not, etc.

Remember how the first episode starts and ends with Fry being a delivery boy?

Thematic progression

If anything, this is where I land in the planning process (which as you’ve seen above lasts about five minutes). I don’t write adventure-type plots in short stories, and I rarely write novels, so for me plots are more about thematic progression to begin with.

To that end, what message do I ultimately want to send? Not in a purely didactic sense, like “racism is pathetic” or “buy my next book,” but rather what should the reader walk away thinking about? The implications of being intellectually disabled in a society with artificial intelligence, what is the difference between a human and a highly developed artificial intelligence, why people want genetically engineered pet sheep?

With due respect to Dick, I think it’s possible to muddle the message by trying to wrap up too many things at once. So it’s important to consider the scope of your work: I think Do Androids Dream Of Electric Sheep? needed to be about 35-50 pages longer to satisfactorily deliver on the plot associated with each of the different ideas introduced in the book.

With that said, though, how far can/should one expound on that theme?

When to End It

I prefer short, punchy endings to long ones (chronologically and arcwise – I support, for instance, the delivery on Wheel of Time’s A Memory of Light). If you liked the end of The World According to Garp, you probably shouldn’t listen to me. That said, I read that book in high school and it’s the only one I can think of where I got annoyed, so I don’t think this is all that common to begin with.

As I see it, there’s two axes on which an ending exists:

  1. Arcs (plot, character, perhaps even world)
  2. Timespan

Tanith Lee’s Night’s Master, although I think it could’ve ended earlier, brings things full circle in a way that works with the context, and more so doesn’t give us the continuation of a lot of different plots. High fantasy, of course, tends to have a lot of different arcs to wrap up, but a) some of these should close out earlier and b) generally speaking, it’d be a whole new book to flesh out more. Dragons of Summer Flame has an epilogue that sets up a whole new series.

To take a lesson from English class: don’t introduce new concepts in your ending. (I don’t know that I’d say earlier books in a series count as having endings per se, but even so, there’s some sense of the book’s arc having either completed or moved to a new stage).

It’s always a good time to subscribe to Clarkesworld

Oh hi there.

I was raised by prudes and would not let my sister read this even though she’s a senior in college.

Make of that what you will.

Anyway, I find our relationship with technology fascinating. The lines between what we’re willing to accept and what we consider too far are shockingly arbitrary.

So yeah, that’s what this is about.

That and literally getting off to attention.

So anyway, I obviously don’t need to read that one again…lucky this entire issue is packed with GOOD STUFF.

You Can’t Edit Every Word: The Idiot’s Guide to Leaving it Alone

Editing is awesome. I love editing so much. But there’s a point at which even I have to put down my red pen and stop.

Stop, you say?!

Yeah, it’s really not that hard to get caught up in this perfectionist funk where all you do is wind around in circles on the same piece. Curb it from the beginning by having an idea of where you want to end. What should the reader walk away thinking about? What should the reader walk away feeling? Do things move fast enough to be interesting?

I stop editing when I get to a point where all my edits are just minor wording tweaks. At that point I’ll go back and forth, and I’m not even changing the overall impression the story creates. If it’s not productive, it’s not worthwhile.

Now that we’ve gotten dessert out of the way:

When to edit

So you’ve just finished writing a piece. Put it down. Do not touch.

Go do something else for a few days. Stroke your…ego, kick back and play videogames, read a book—actually, reading a book can be very useful if you know the author does something well that you have trouble with. In the past, I’ve read Pullman before jumping into edits on science fiction because Pullman’s descriptions are so much richer than mine. That way, the original write is still ‘me,’ but while editing, I’ve got a good baseline for intended changes.

Okay, have you taken at least three days? (Minimum: if you’re still in the mindset you were in when you wrote the thing, take more. You wouldn’t stuff your face right after hors d’oeuvres, would you?)

Cool, let’s do this.

How to edit

Let’s take a moment to discuss what editing is. Yes, there is an element of going back and fixing technical errors, as appropriate for informal writing. People don’t always talk in complete sentences, so make sure you’re not applying the rigidity of formal—essay—writing to your work without reason.

But the bigger purpose of editing is to consolidate the impression your story leaves on the reader.

  1. Keep the big questions in mind. Is your work doing what you want it to do? Is it engaging—will people even get to the end? Like good food, it shouldn’t be so uniformly spiced or bland that people get bored. But at the same time, it can’t be too obvious; the changes in pacing and subject should follow naturally.
  2. Reread your story. This is why taking a break is so important. You need the reader’s mindset, and readers don’t have 50 billion hours of backstory raging in their brains, nor do they already love your work. Note that this also makes it a lot easier to pick up typos. Your brain is no longer seeing what it thinks is there.
  3. Don’t spaz out if you don’t have the fix to a bad line/paragraph/whatever right away. These things take time. On average I go through about five revisions of a work before I’m satisfied enough. Sometimes changes get undone, too. Mood impacts approach.
  4. Save versions, or use Track Changes (all hail Track Changes). Especially with poetry, where the placement of each and every word matters—not that it shouldn’t for prose—you may go through a lot of iterations and not be sure which one is the best version. That’s okay. Save them all and do a little taste test when your palate is fresh.
  5. Done? Good. Now read it again. See above for when you can stop doing this.

Make sure your finished work has the right punch, match it with the right wine, and all will be well.

The Problem With Character Sheets

To be clear, there are some pretty awesome character sheets out there. I don’t personally use them, but I’ve seen others make them work. I’m not here to dispute the fact that they’ve got some utility, but I am here to point out one big problem with relying on a list of traits—which is generally how character sheets present these things—to define your character.

(Note: This also applies to Mary Sue tests. ‘Not a Mary Sue’ just means your character isn’t a perfect storm of coincidence. It has nothing to do with likeability or even believability. isn’t a Mary Sue, either.)

  • Strengths
  • Weaknesses
  • Quirks

I think this approach is, if it’s the only approach you take to figuring out a character, a really bad idea.

Take a moment to think about your best friend. What’s their favorite food? What are they good at, and what are things they do that make you Google good places to dump a body?

While you were coming up with answers to these totally not intrusive questions, did you really just pull the information from some mental dossier, or did you picture past situations where these things have come up? (Anyone who watches ‘Supernatural’ knows about Dean and pie.)

 

The people you know aren’t a list of traits or neatly checked boxes on a sheet of paper. They’re an aggregation of moments and scenes, things they’ve told you and things you’ve seen them do. (Especially seen. People grossly overestimate how much data words actually offer. Go outside, guys.)

Let’s take a simple trait like ‘outgoing.’ Being outgoing could mean working in a field that involves a lot of face time, enjoying parties, talking to random people on the train. But a college professor probably doesn’t spend weekends half-conscious in a puddle of vomit or make polite smiling faces at every pleb on the bus. A 26-year-old high school teacher, on the other hand, would totally go out more—but what about during finals week when she’s got to get all those grades in? What about a high school teacher with war PTSD, or a college professor who’s, like, super chill dude and smokes “herbs” with his drum circle?

Traits on a page don’t say much about behavior, which is what happens in scenes, also known as those things your readers will actually be reading. Reducing someone to a series of flaws/strengths/quirks overlooks the fact that people don’t behave consistently.

Environmental factors FTW, not to mention state of mind at the time. Do you behave the same way at work, home, and when you’re out with friends? Would your boss list the same strengths and weaknesses in your personality as your sibling or your best friend?

If you’re going to use character sheets, don’t let them be the be-all-end-all of how you create or develop your characters.

Visualize these traits. A lot of people write scenes for practice, which is a fantastic way of figuring out a character. I base all characters off aspects from my own real life and interactions. When that’s impossible (e.g. murderers), I look at TV shows, movies, and case studies, in particular Oliver Sacks’ work for the weirder stuff. I always start with a mental picture.

Mental pictures are good.

See a person within that demographic act out a situation, and then make it happen on paper. Pull and twist like taffy so you’ve got exaggerations in the right places, and bam, motherfucker! (As a cross between Emeril Lagasse and Samuel L. Jackson would say.)

When you’re writing a character, you need to consider reasons that might pull them one way or the other, factors that will draw out certain traits and weaken others (chew that taffy). All actions result from some type of motivation, anything ranging from your money to your life to your sanity. (Motivation runs a wide gamut. My favorite motivation for characters is trying to escape the inevitable misery of the plot.)

I find that this method inevitably includes character development (not necessarily positive or progressive). The person you started with hasn’t had those experiences during the plot to sway them one way or another. Once they have, they’re going to behave differently…or the reader will see their actions differently because of new information.

The best way to make a character a convincing person is to have them be a person.